IELTS Writing Task 2(Sample Answer)

Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age.

Some groups of the workforce ought to be retired and should be eligible for retirement benefits in advance as giving up work at the age of 65 years for all the categories of the job is unjust. I completely agree with this opinion and think that some work involves hard work, manual labor and mental risk which is not appropriate after reaching a certain age.
First of all, I believe that some of the occupations involve a lot of hardship and physical labor. Even if machines have replaced manpower everywhere, but to operate large machinery, labor is still required. For a person who is already in his 50’s, does not have so much stamina and power as compared to his young counterpart. Works like construction and mining involve lifting of heavyweight, climbing to the top, etc, and therefore are dangerous after a certain age.  For instance, it has been seen in sports like cricket, since physical health and stamina are an integral part of playing any game, so the players tend to retire at and around the age of 37.
Secondly, there are few jobs which involve mental risk as well and are  not fit for people suffering from certain diseases such as hypertension, heart, etc which are quite common  in the age group of people above 45 these days. There is no doubt that experience makes people more confident and fewer  mistakes are likely to occur but it is observed that banking activities involve a lot of risks and most of the staff especially in the government banks are aged above 45. Thus, in such cases, the young people who are more active and ready to take the risk do not get opportunities.
To conclude, I strongly believe that the government should revise the retirement age for some category of jobs and bring it down to 45 years and such workforce should be given appropriate and attractive retirement benefits.

Estimated Band Score-6.5

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August 27, 2020